Name: Kylar Grye
Rank: silver hand
race: Imperial
age: 23
skills: Crossbowman, good with longsword, hunter.
weapons: Crossbow named Retribution with bi-pod and silver bolts and a Silver Longsword called Justice.
Unique skills: excellent hearing and sight which helps when hunting
Armour: wears black leather armour and and a black hood.
likes: hunting, nature, reading, killing werewolves and homemade
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Dislikes: werewolves and confined spaces.
Looks: short, crimson red hair, pale eyes. no facial hair.
Background: kylar was born into the the silver hand. his family was hunting werewolves before the order of the silver hand was even formed. as a child he showed great skill with crossbows and was assaigned to serve with the orders hunters. Kylar was a natural hunter, killing his first werewolf at 15. he quickly roce through the ranks and became the orders top hunter.
Personality: very loyal. a ruthless hunter but easy to get along with when not hunting. he has a deep hatred for werewolves and will stop at nothing untill they are wiped from the earth. his hatred for the werewolves is because he was by his trainers that they are nothing but abominations.
thats him in hunting gear but he would have a crossbow instead. the other one he looks like except older and with pale eyes.
I'm debating your character card, but here, I will be honest with you on what I am feeling right now.
To me, making a character card is extremely important. It used to be less important to me, and the focus I brought my character in through the story seemed more important, but over time I found equality of measure. I am not asking you to make your character card a novel, but I am asking you to put more thought it into rather than me looking at it and feeling like you took a 3x5 notecard out for a quick reference of notes for class and quickly jotted things down. Don't get upset with me for saying this, and please don't be offended as I am just trying to get my point across. As you can see by those I have accepted, I am not asking for you to make huge contributions to the character card--just be more personalized and creative with it. Add some length, full sentences, and do not be stingy. Like, when I asked you to add a better description of his appearance, in my opinion adding a picture is being stingy. Sure, I can grasp the concept of what a guy with no facial hair and red hair would look like--I could put that on any male--but I am asking you to put forth the creative mental image you view when you see that character into words.
I haven't heard anything bad about your roleplaying skill, and I would like to add you to my team because if you are in Shew's RP, then I regard you as having to be a talented writer since I respect Shew himself for such reasons. And he, and I mean this lightheartedly, is pickier than I am.
haha!
And also, if you are going to be apart of the group, I have already picked Kir the Silent to be the leader and Uther to follow after as second in command. So you will need to format your character in order to reflect the third position. Plus, I underlined the fact of your character having killed a werewolf at the age of 15. Because if one knows the story of the Ula, then one would understand that the werewolves in this role-play, for both packs, are both extremely powerful supernatural beasts and it would take a great deal of experience and strength in order for a character of the silver hand to take them down. Not that it isn't possible, just that it isn't easy to do and most likely in general for a regular werewolf would probably take more than one person if thought in a realistic aspect.
I know this is fantasy based, and is a spin off from actual lore, but it doesn't mean that I don't take into account for a realistic quality to be had about characters. Embellishing is fine and all of that, and I myself love to talk up the great qualities and strengths that my characters possess--but I feel you went just a tad overboard with the whole 15 thing.
Reform your thoughts, please check for grammatical error, spelling errors, and punctuation mistakes. And then get back to me.
Thank you for understanding.
Sorry I am being a nitpicker!