PostScript
P.S.
Thanks, Wow 10 points for posting a profile?
Thanks, Wow 10 points for posting a profile?
What do you mean?Soo... err... should I hold off on RPing, then, until further notice?
I think we'll all be glad to have you with us, PostScript. Welcome to Two Sides of a Coin! Make sure to read the entire RP before posting.So I realize you have no idea what my writing skills are like.
And it looks like your all going through a loss.
So I offer this short story I wrote for class a few years back.
On the Wind
The insights and thoughts of the young strike me, giving me pause. On a sightseeing trip with my nephew to Bright Rock Mountain is a good example of the Buddha type moments of youth. Let me elaborate.
It is a bright and cheery late spring day, when we came to the top of Bright Rock Mountain in the Blue Ridge range of North Carolina. We were taking in the vast panorama of blue green mountains fading to a pale denim color in the distance. When I noticed my nephew, a normally rambunctious child with a tendency to always be causing a commotion, was strangely silent. Appearing lost in thought. I wandered over and asked what he was thinking about. He stated, "I wish I was a buzzard." So matter of fact that it literally begged for more. So I inquired as to why. He told me that it was so he could glide on the wind without much care for the rest of the world. This is the kind of soul searching deep thought kind of statements you only seem to get from philosophy majors and children.
I then got lost in my own philosophical debate. What was my place here on this mountain and my place in this world. Am I not deep enough to consider these mountains? Was I too caught up in maintaining the schedule of the day? I paused and thought... I too want to be one of those birds on the wing. Gliding on thermals, wingtips alight with wind and taking in the panorama of a life passing me by.
Anyway give it a read, and let me know if I can join
Ok, glad to be part of the group.I think we'll all be glad to have you with us, PostScript. Welcome to Two Sides of a Coin! Make sure to read the entire RP before posting.
Ok, glad to be part of the group.
I have read the whole story... not sure why someone would apply to join one without doing so.
Is it permissible to do a touch of creative criticsim?
I hope so cause I am gonna anyway. Please please take these with a grain of salt.
sorry if this rubs the wrong way. And I will understand if you no longer want me to join.
- Skyrimosity: Edwyn is a ex-adventurer? Cause he seems more than a touch rusty, I like the wife angle. I feel you need to give us more reminices and memory flash backs. To give her more life in the story. And draw our hearts more to Edwyns pain.
- Madgod: Early on you used the others characters voices to kinda fill up space. And I as a reader have no idea who Velid is as a person.
- Minstral: Circe has a whole bunch going on. But I am intrigued as to what direction its all going in. I have to agree with PurpleShew the astral thing was too much too often and you seem to be hanging back on it now.
- PurpleShew: Wow Bruynzeel is totally a god... (oops sorry I see he left.) ...over the top with skills but the skill in writing and how normal you treated him, not making everything obvious to all was nice. But still over the top with skills.
- Neverwin: I am in awe, you have me rolling with your dwarf wanna be elf. I admire the true character that Sveer is!
- Rekamennos: Like Circe, and Bruynzeel your character is over the top with the astral stuff. The raw power almost god like. Are you english or american cause your posts seem like this is not your natural language. To repetitive of small details. And constantly schooling us in your lore. Might want to let the reader remember your stuff on their own and not have to rediscribe it like they are idiots. And looking over your last posts I feel you are not being your character. Esset was robbing you. And yet you ignored that and asked everyone to hurry up, moving away and not partisipating. Where I think Leilani would have been all over the assassin with anger.
- Soundwave129: Whats with the daedra spiders, is that even possible in game? And like purpleshew said maybe you would be more... apologetic and conciliatory when you are caught not threatening those your trying to join. Looks like your in a cycle of distrust now.
Skyrimosity: Edwyn is a ex-adventurer? Cause he seems more than a touch rusty, I like the wife angle. I feel you need to give us more reminices and memory flash backs. To give her more life in the story. And draw our hearts more to Edwyns pain.
I didn't put the bad manners thing on him. If I thought so, I would have. *shrugs*