Try to stuff in a bit more details in your posts Colonel, that really helps with immersion, I don't want to be "that guy", but the posts felt a bit rushed... Take your time, imagine the scene in front of you, describe everything happening, what Nomad hears, feels, smells, says, moves, and thinks. Do that and you'll be the number 1 Rp'er on the forum (after Moi, bien sur.)
Still, great entrance, Sounds like a badass, don't try kill Jokar just.. He's exhausted as hell :l