Well, my draft isn't quite there yet. The intro went well, but I may be giving away too many details about Kiyoshi too quickly.
Some editing may be an order.
Anyway, I'm at the point where Kiyoshi is leaving Whiterun for the Imperial City with the finished sword "Crimson Night." The draft shouldn't get too much longer before he's arrested.
Personally, I think I'm doing everything correctly, but I guess we'll see. When the draft is finished, I'll PM it to you Gidian, just to make sure everything is done correctly story-wise and I didn't miss any edits.
Oh, one more thing. Is it strange for me to give names to the swords Kiyoshi makes?