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Lyrics! My second ever attempt.

Discussion in 'Musicians Nook' started by xsneakyxsimx, Apr 1, 2013.

  1. xsneakyxsimx

    xsneakyxsimx Well-Known Member

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    Okay, so I wrote this yesterday. I think that it's fairly decent, but I'd like to here what you guys (and girls) think. Enjoy! P.S: It's written as a metal song, so the verses are screamed. Just a heads up. :p

    [Verse 1]

    Well hello, welcome to the world
    That we are forced to live in.
    And now, you are helping those
    who never asked nor needed it
    I never thought I'd see the day
    When you threw all you held true away
    Just so you'd be with those
    that will just do the same to you.

    [Chorus 1 {Clean Vocals}]

    Where were you?
    When they showed us what's right and what's wrong.
    And now were here on the battlefield, and your defending
    those who said they were strong.

    Yeah, where were you?
    When they showed us what's right and what's wrong.
    And now your defending those who are weak,
    But they all told you they were strong!

    [Verse 2]

    And now you realise what you've done
    But still you try to deny it.
    Then say that I'm just jealous, but I tell you what
    I see them for who they are!
    They are all just thieves and cowards
    And they claim they know what's best
    But what you don't realise is that
    They don't care, and they'll throw you away all the same!

    [Chorus 2 {Clean Vocals}]

    Where were you?
    When they showed us what's right and what's wrong.
    And now were here on the battlefield, and your defending
    those who said they were strong.

    Yeah, where were you?
    When they showed us what's right and what's wrong.
    And now your defending those who are weak,
    But they all told you they were strong!

    [Bridge {Clean Vocals}]

    And now I hope that you will see
    Through all the lies and realise
    That they don't matter and that
    no-one can change who you really are.
    (x2)

    [Verse 3]

    And now I start to lose faith in
    What has become of you.
    You claim that you are no different
    But you are just lying to yourself.
    And hopefully next time we meet
    You start to change for the better
    But now, I no longer trust
    This person you have become!

    [Chorus 3 {Clean Vocals}]

    Where were you?
    When they showed us what's right and what's wrong.
    And now were here on the battlefield, and your defending
    those who said they were strong.

    Yeah, where were you?
    When they showed us what's right and what's wrong.
    And now your defending those who are weak,
    But they all told you they were strong!
    (x2)

    That they were strong!
    But they're not strong!
    But they all told you that
    They! Were! Strong!
     
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  2. Scarheart

    Scarheart "Eternity isn't forever."

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    Living in an impersonal world that acts as your inner child's pedophile.
     
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  3. xsneakyxsimx

    xsneakyxsimx Well-Known Member

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    Haha, that's one way of putting it. :)
     
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    xsneakyxsimx Well-Known Member

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    Here, some more lyrics. Wasn't going to post these at first but I changed my mind.

    [Verse 1a]

    There are those that say they can trust in me,
    That phrase I can't comprehend.
    How can they be so sure in me when
    I can't even trust myself?
    They say they know what I'm going through
    Which is both a truth and a lie.
    Because they can't see what's inside my head
    and guess what, neither can I.

    [Verse 1b]

    But I've seen the face of my own true demon
    And his wicked spite in me.
    Disguising himself through my bad actions
    Without ever being seen.
    I want to blame him for all my mistakes
    But he's only part of it. Because
    The other half is the fact that I
    Gave in to him in the first place.

    [Chorus]

    I don't know who I am anymore
    This person you see isn't me at all.
    I feel alone in this world, truth be told
    Because I'm not the person I was before.

    [Verse 2]

    They say that one can learn from there mistakes
    But my mind like to differ.
    Because the one thing I want to change is
    My ignorance to the past.
    People always say that 'It gets better',
    But I never want to believe it.
    Because I know my life will never change
    It will never change for the best.
     
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    Irish Thane of Solitude

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  6. xsneakyxsimx

    xsneakyxsimx Well-Known Member

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  7. Jei El

    Jei El We will be avenged.

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    I read it from top to bottom.
     
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    xsneakyxsimx Well-Known Member

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    Yet more lyrics... but with a bit of a twist. Let's see how well they look.

    Food of thought, provokes action, consequence.
    Freedom weans, as big brother rules, controls.
    Those who fight, retaliate, bring madness.
    Others that look on, ignorant, stay restrained.

    Some claim change, improvement and success,
    Many fall victim, to lies and deceit.
    A few bring hope, and a revolution.
    But they are shunned, by hand of greed.
     
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    xsneakyxsimx Well-Known Member

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    Yay, more lyrics! :p :D This song is titled 'Rivalry'. Enjoy. :)

    [Verse 1]
    Well now, what did you expect to see?
    (You're facing superiority!)
    You just won't back down, and now.
    (You'll just hurt everyone around!)
    Ego's and agro start to run amuck.
    (And you don't care who will get fl*ffed!)
    Just take one good look and you will see.
    (All the fear made by your greed!)

    [Pre-Chorus]
    Take a look, take a look
    (Take a look before you leap!)

    [Chorus]
    (Rivalry!) Two forces brawling.
    (Rivalry!) They're blind and falling.
    (Rivalry!) Can't see what they've done.
    (Rivalry!) The damage to come.

    (Rivalry!) x 4

    [Verse 2]
    The opposition know just what to do.
    (Cause they've done it all before!)
    You don't realize what you're in for now.
    (Your eyes are blind with rage again!)
    Logic and reason are thrown out the window now
    (Brute force shall be used again today!)
    Take one last breath before the plunge.
    They'll drag you down without regret!)

    [Pre-chorus]
    Take a look, take a look
    (Take a look before you leap!)

    [Chorus]
    (Rivalry!) Two forces brawling.
    (Rivalry!) They're blind and falling.
    (Rivalry!) Can't see what they've done.
    (Rivalry!) The damage to come.

    [Bridge]
    (Rivalry!) x 12

    [Solo]
    [Pre-chorus 2]
    Take a look (before you leap.)
    Take a look (before you leap.)
    Take a look, take a look
    (Take a look before you leap!)

    [Chorus]
    (Rivalry!) Two forces brawling.
    (Rivalry!) They're blind and falling.
    (Rivalry!) Can't see what they've done.
    (Rivalry!) The damage to come.

    [Outro]
    (Rivalry!) x 9

    (Rivalry!) Today's the day.
    You see that you're the one to blame!
    Rivalry!
     
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  10. xsneakyxsimx

    xsneakyxsimx Well-Known Member

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    Two additions. One older, one newer.



     
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