Looking for feedback on my character card/idea

[Gunder]

Name: Gunder
Race: Nord, Male
Class: Barbarian (Heavy armor, one handed skills )
Backstory: Gunder lived with his family in helgen, but was sent away to fight for the imperial army in morrowind to hold up the current commotion, but on his return to helgen he was attacked by bandits causing his cart and all of his fellow battle members killed, after a day of walking to the border he was ambushed by the imperials, they could not figure out it was gunder due to excessive facial injuries and the fact that he was only a private in their commands. after all the commotion with the dragon had cleared, he had heard news his family had escaped , but their locations were unkown, gunder knew it was true, because when he was but a child the rest of his family we're infected with vampirism, out of honor he declined to join them. so to this day, he travels alongside Lydia, his current love in search of his family and peace in skyrim

 

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It's a good background but you might want to put what his equipment is like weapons and armor. Also what he looks like such as facial features, oh and age to if you want. Hope that helps.