I am considering an edit attempt to reshape who Jack is, as the more I have had time to think about my writing the less I like it. I think I've gone rather overboard too soon with him.
To be fair, there's a lot about the setting that isn't even remotely realisticHis mental imbalance isn't realistic, in my opinion. But, do as you see fit.
Eh. He's not detached from emotion, though I won't go into detail on the matter, nor do I intend for him to be. Just the opposite in fact, just with a tough exterior. The intro and a few subsequent posts are fine in my eyes, but it's the latest posts that I need to clean up and where I feel I went overboard and laid the foundations for such an assertion as that one.What, because it's a fantastical world filled with demons, angels, dragons, elves, and axe-wielding tree stumps? That doesn't change the fact that Jack is a human, and has a human psyche. In order to be so detached from emotions, he would have to not be attached to his sister. To achieve the level of psychosis you want, he'd have had to cut ties with all of his family, most likely through violence to ensure he wasn't followed by his family.