OOC 18+ The Madgod's Request

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    Destiny

    The Fox
    I'll post it anyway, just because I like to make my CCs ^_^

    Name : Destiny
    Age: 19
    Sex: Female
    Origins: Unknown, probably Riften.
    Race: Nord
    Class: Archer, Thief,Rogue
    Religion: Nocturnal
    Afflictions: None, Mostly because she only does what is asked by her superiors at the Thieves Guild
    Property: A large home in Riften.
    Appearance: Rather tall, thin with an hourglass figure, White long hair with blood red highlights, black war paint on her eyes and a star tatoo on her neck, black lips, white skin, ice blue (to white-ish) eyes, sharp teeth and somewhat long pointy fingernails (when she takes off her gloves)
    Clothing: At night,She wears the whole set of Nightingale Armor, but with half the mask (it only covers her face up untill the eyes, the hood covers the rest, only for the eyes to be visible), she also has an ebony and blood red ruby necklace which she takes pride in. In the morning hours or while not being on a mission, she wears the Thieve's guild armor or just clothes.

    Weapons: A Nightingale bow with Ebony Arrows and two Ebony Daggers.
    Combat Tactics: She mostly hits her pray from afar, with a poisoned arrow and then sneaks up on it and deliveres a final blow. Magic: Illusion, Conjuration, Restoration Personality: She prefers to be quiet and doesn't trust someone easily. She is loyal and trustworthy when she bonds with someone but will not hesitate to kill them if she is betrayed. She has been hurt a lot and prefers a luxurious life in Riften where she is a well-known theif.
    Likes: Dogs, Theives, Blood-red Rubies, Her bow, expensive items
    Dislikes: Liars, Traitors, Guards, The Thalmor.
    Bio: Her past is blurry, with no memory of her Family. Her oldest memory is the day that Brynjolf picked her up from the street and asked her if she wanted to join the Thieves guild. After a few years, she excelled at Archery, due to her training with Niruin, and also One handed and Sneak. On her 18th Birthday she devoted herself to acing her skills in order to become a Nightingale.She was also interested in other Daedric Princes but not worshiping them. she had taken particular interest to Merhrunes Dagon, from whom she wishes to obtain his dagger, the Merhrune's Razor, but that's only after she becomes a Nightingale.
     

    shadowkitty

    Mistress of Shadows
    Nice CC Destiny. Could you try posting a pic as well? And an example of your writing. If you are in an RP already you can link it if you want and I will take a look.

    Iman and I will keep it in mind if we want someone to come in. Just so you know, there is a line-up and we have to invite people in order, to be fair, but I don't see why we couldn't have you in sometime, if Iman agrees.
     

    Destiny

    The Fox
    Nice CC Destiny. Could you try posting a pic as well? And an example of your writing. If you are in an RP already you can link it if you want and I will take a look.

    Iman and I will keep it in mind if we want someone to come in. Just so you know, there is a line-up and we have to invite people in order, to be fair, but I don't see why we couldn't have you in sometime, if Iman agrees.
    Thank you! I'm in The Channels, I will post a link in a few minutes! Well I don't have a pic right now but I can try and find one! >.< thanks again. I will be waiting...!

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    Irishman

    Well-Endowed Member
    Destiny...

    First off, I do like an hourglass figure :p , however there is a few pointers I would like to give you about your CC, and hopefully you take it as constructive criticism as I am not trying to pick on you.

    First thing I noticed was you have a lot of different Classes and Religions, some of which are contradictory. For an example, an Archer is generally a person in a large group who provides ranged assistance and is skilled at forming up and firing volleys at the enemy with other archers. A Ranger is generally a loner or works in a very small group that is adept at tracking and hunting. Having just 1 or maybe 2 primary skills and religions (especially at such a young age) shows to me that you have a good idea of what your character excels at. Remember its only a guide and your character can still grow in the Roleplay.

    Religion in Skyrim is a fairly complex thing (not just in Skyrim I spose), especially when you start mixing your Deadric Princes with the Aedra (good Gods). I'm not saying a character can't pray to different Gods, but when you have such a large list of Deadra is starts to sound like you are just naming what missions your character has done in the game (your in-game character can influence and inspire your Rp character but should still be separate). In Skyrim Lore, Daedric Princes possess your soul if your are a devout follower and don't take kindly to sharing. So you might pick a Prince (eg. Nocturnal for the Thieves Guild or Mehrunes for his dagger) and say your character has had dealings with that Prince and just leave it at that. The Aedra are fine to have a larger list, but are mostly not mixed in if you are a Daedric worshipper (Orcs and Dunmer are exceptions to this due to their cultural relations to Malacath and Azura/Boethiah).

    ...sorry I'm writing a lot, but I am going to continue :p

    So your character is 19? Only just an adult and she has already left the Dark Brotherhood (which in itself is usually a for-life organization) and is already extremely gifted enough to be part of an elite and extremely rare group of Nightingales? I'm 100% sure that the Brotherhood would not let a 15year old be an accomplished assassin than just walk away to join another criminal cell... Again, just 3years of being a Thief she is inducted into one of the most secretive organizations in Tamriel (most people dont even know they exist, they are far more secretive than even the Brotherhood)..? She may be a gifted 19 year old, but what you are suggesting is a bit far-fetched imo.

    In Lore (there is a book on this subject in the TG HQ, if memory serves... http://www.uesp.net/wiki/Skyrim:Nightingales:_Fact_or_Fiction? ), most people have not see a Nightingale, which leads me to believe that the outfit is only used in ceremonies or when on the job, not in broad daylight. So perhaps if you want your character as a Nightingale, she may wear more average clothes during the day (to blend in) and dons the cape at night :cool:

    I dont have a big issue with your character having a Daedric Artifact (Mehrunes Dagger) but again, I would reconsider having just one or at a stretch, 2 complimenting Daedric Princes to follow...


    Again, I hope you dont take offense to these points, Its just my opinion and I believe it would make your CC more realistic and salable. As for you applying, we are really just at the start of our journey and would like to get things moving again before we make any big decisions. We will definitely keep you and any1 else who may apply in mind for later on though :)
     

    Destiny

    The Fox
    Destiny...

    First off, I do like an hourglass figure :p , however there is a few pointers I would like to give you about your CC, and hopefully you take it as constructive criticism as I am not trying to pick on you.

    First thing I noticed was you have a lot of different Classes and Religions, some of which are contradictory. For an example, an Archer is generally a person in a large group who provides ranged assistance and is skilled at forming up and firing volleys at the enemy with other archers. A Ranger is generally a loner or works in a very small group that is adept at tracking and hunting. Having just 1 or maybe 2 primary skills and religions (especially at such a young age) shows to me that you have a good idea of what your character excels at. Remember its only a guide and your character can still grow in the Roleplay.

    Religion in Skyrim is a fairly complex thing (not just in Skyrim I spose), especially when you start mixing your Deadric Princes with the Aedra (good Gods). I'm not saying a character can't pray to different Gods, but when you have such a large list of Deadra is starts to sound like you are just naming what missions your character has done in the game (your in-game character can influence and inspire your Rp character but should still be separate). In Skyrim Lore, Daedric Princes possess your soul if your are a devout follower and don't take kindly to sharing. So you might pick a Prince (eg. Nocturnal for the Thieves Guild or Mehrunes for his dagger) and say your character has had dealings with that Prince and just leave it at that. The Aedra are fine to have a larger list, but are mostly not mixed in if you are a Daedric worshipper (Orcs and Dunmer are exceptions to this due to their cultural relations to Malacath and Azura/Boethiah).

    ...sorry I'm writing a lot, but I am going to continue :p

    So your character is 19? Only just an adult and she has already left the Dark Brotherhood (which in itself is usually a for-life organization) and is already extremely gifted enough to be part of an elite and extremely rare group of Nightingales? I'm 100% sure that the Brotherhood would not let a 15year old be an accomplished assassin than just walk away to join another criminal cell... Again, just 3years of being a Thief she is inducted into one of the most secretive organizations in Tamriel (most people dont even know they exist, they are far more secretive than even the Brotherhood)..? She may be a gifted 19 year old, but what you are suggesting is a bit far-fetched imo.

    In Lore (there is a book on this subject in the TG HQ, if memory serves... http://www.uesp.net/wiki/Skyrim:Nightingales:_Fact_or_Fiction? ), most people have not see a Nightingale, which leads me to believe that the outfit is only used in ceremonies or when on the job, not in broad daylight. So perhaps if you want your character as a Nightingale, she may wear more average clothes during the day (to blend in) and dons the cape at night :cool:

    I dont have a big issue with your character having a Daedric Artifact (Mehrunes Dagger) but again, I would reconsider having just one or at a stretch, 2 complimenting Daedric Princes to follow...


    Again, I hope you dont take offense to these points, Its just my opinion and I believe it would make your CC more realistic and salable. As for you applying, we are really just at the start of our journey and would like to get things moving again before we make any big decisions. We will definitely keep you and any1 else who may apply in mind for later on though :)


    Thanks for the feedback, I'll change these things right away
     

    A.Auditore

    maybe...
    *waits* where's my thingy, my constructive criticism?! D:
     

    A.Auditore

    maybe...
    http://i.qkme.me/3rpd5p.jpg

    Although half of what you said is true, I have been around rping for awhile I still welcome criticism so... *evil hands* where's mine?! D: ;)
     

    A.Auditore

    maybe...
    Also should I post an example writing as well? ^_*
     

    Irishman

    Well-Endowed Member
    Ok Ash, the only things I would add to your CC is specifically what type of magic she uses or knows, what type of dagger does she have and also what would her motivations be to join the group? I cant imagine a thief just wanting to tag along with some strangers just because she wants a change of scenery :p
     

    A.Auditore

    maybe...
    You want me to provide pictures of her weaponry?
    Also I personally don't use magic while game play and if I do it's fire (hot like me ;) kidding if you all know me by now)

    But I could add those things, as for joining she could want new scenery you don't know her!.... Yet ;)
     

    Irishman

    Well-Endowed Member
    You don't need pictures if you don't wanna... although you do seem to like your pictures...

    Just 'glass dagger' or something like that. Its not vital, I just had to think of something coz you put me on the spot :p

    Also should I post an example writing as well? ^_*

    What is that ? ^_* ? A happy pirate or something? haha No, I think if Kitty or myself need to view your writing style, we have plenty of material we can have a look at thanks :D
     

    A.Auditore

    maybe...
    I do like my pictures! I take them myself ^_* yes it's a happy pirate :)



    Oh gosh please don't look at my writing
     

    Destiny

    The Fox
    I myself love the history of the Nightingales and had not read these books previously! I find them rather interesting, especially the 2nd story... who knew Karliah was half or quarter dunmer?

    http://www.uesp.net/wiki/Skyrim:The_Nightingales
    Actually, you can tell she's Dunmer! She has dark skin, and violet eyes! + I've read almost everything about her xD

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    Specter of Death

    Omnipresent Moderator
    Staff member
    Actually, you can tell she's Dunmer! She has dark skin, and violet eyes! + I've read almost everything about her xD

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    I think he may have meant that he thought she was all dunmer. Not just part.

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    A.Auditore

    maybe...
    Don't hurt meh kitty!
     

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