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jorgea

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"I can't believe I let you talk me into this," Onmund muttered, pulling off his rain-soaked hood. It landed on the carriage seat with a wet slap. He picked up an empty sack from the pile, plucked away a stray piece of straw, and draped it over his head.
"What a fuss you make! It's only water, you know." Nikhaya shifted the reins to one hand and rummaged through her satchel with the other until she found an apple. She tossed it to Onmund, snorting back laughter as she caught a glimpse of his makeshift rain hat. "Here. Eat breakfast. Breakfast always cheers this one up." She squinted at the horizon, partly looking for the next road sign but mostly lost in thought.
Onmund rubbed the apple over his sodden robes and took a huge bite. "You sure got quiet in a hurry," he said through a mouthful of fruit. "Something on your mind?"
"Mm, yes. I never imagined you had so much hair under that hood."
"Huh. You're a fine one to talk."
The old carriage creaked and groaned over the wet cobblestones. If anyone else had taken the road from Whiterun to the Pale that morning, they would have arrived at their destination with an amusing tale to tell - the contents of this particular carriage were a memorable sight indeed.
For one thing, it was driven by a Khajiit. She was clad in leather armor and a mage hood, her pale green eyes alive with the glow of health and naturally high spirits. Occasionally she produced a bottle of mead and took a swig or two to supplement those spirits.
The real spectacle was in the back seat, for the former owner of said carriage was slumped in the corner, partially buried under burlap sacks and straw. He was bound and unconscious, and a large bump had recently appeared on his head. A thoroughly damp and unhappy College mage sat beside him with a half-eaten apple in one hand and an empty wine bottle in the other, ready to give the poor man another mysterious bump on the head if the need arose.
A great wooden box, long and narrow, took up most of the carriage. A strange odor like ancient moss and mildewed parchment permeated the wood, but neither of them had remarked upon it. After a few months of sleeping and studying in the Hall of Attainment, it practically smelled like home.
"I know. We'll sing one of your Nord songs. That will pass the time in the carriage, yes? Khajiit will sing the first part, and you can do the next bit." Nikhaya cleared her throat. "Ohhhhhh...there once was a hero named Ragnar the Red..."
Onmund was silent.
Nikhaya shrugged. She felt around under the seat for her bottle of mead. "Ah well. At least it's a fine day."
"It's raining. A lot."
"Of course, but the world smells so....delicious when it rains. Don't you think? Besides, a day without snow is as fine a day as you can ask for in Skyrim."
"Hmph."
They rode on in silence. The sky had lightened considerably since they'd set out for Winterhold at dawn, but the day was still gray and chilly and, in Onmund's opinion, far too wet to be going anywhere in a carriage. Nikhaya hummed the bards' song to herself - a local favorite, so they claimed - and patted her pockets in search of a snack. Ah! Salted gourd seeds.
"Why won't you tell me what's in the box?"
Nikhaya chuckled. "Aha, so that is what is bothering you. What you have a...what is it...a bee under your hat for."
"A bee in your bonnet. And no, I'm bothered by all of this! 'Follow me, I need your help', you said, and being the good friend that I am, I did everything you asked. I hired the carriage, I rode all the way out to the Barrow to meet you. But you never said anything about beating an innocent man to death and stealing the carriage from him!"
"Pfft. He's not dead." Nikhaya popped a seed into her mouth and chewed thoughtfully. "Is he?"
"What? No! I mean..." Onmund leaned over the pitiful figure and frowned. "I don't know. He hasn't moved in a long time."
"Hm." Nikhaya spat the seed husk into the road. "Kick him and see what he does."
"You're horrible!"
She shrugged. Onmund stretched out his foot and gently prodded the erstwhile carriage driver with his boot. The bound man groaned and fell over behind the box.

"Alive?"
"Yep."
"Good. Give him another thump with the bottle if he starts coming around before we get to Dawnstar. And take that silly sack off your head. You look like this one's mad old grandmother."
Onmund sighed, exasperated. "The box, Nikhaya. You didn't answer my question."
Nikhaya turned and favored him with what was meant to be a charming smile, which necessarily meant favoring him with a view of her gleaming white fangs as well. Onmund closed his mouth and sat back, as far from her unsettling grin as he could get without actually moving.
"You should have more faith, friend. Khajiit is your friend, no?"
"Yes..."
"This one faced many dangers to recover your family treasure from Enthir."
"I know, I know you did, and I'm grateful. I am. It's just..."
"Hm?"
"Well, it's just what you said. You do dangerous things for people. Crazy things! There could be anything in this box, knowing you." He started ticking off possibilities one by one on his fingers. "Dangerous weapons...skooma...it better not be skooma...stolen goods..."
Nikhaya nodded sagely. "Stormcloaks, horkers, beehives, two hundred wooden ladles..."
"I'm not talking to you anymore if you're going to make fun of me."
She tried not to smile, but she couldn't help herself. "Ah, Onmund. My brave Nord companion. I offer you a humble apology for my bad joke. As for what is in the box, it is for Enthir."
Onmund snorted. "Enthir. I should have known he would be mixed up in this. What is it?"
Nikhaya was quiet for a moment. "He needed a specimen," she replied hesitantly. "For his research. He asked me to fetch it for him."
"A specimen." Onmund's face was utterly blank.
"Yes. He needed a fresh one. A live one, that is. Well, somewhat live..."
"Right. That's it. I am getting out of the carriage this instant and walking back to Whiterun if you don't tell me what's in here!" He gave it a vicious kick for emphasis and immediately winced. "Ouch."
A guttural growl of fury issued from the box. Onmund cried out and leapt to his feet, nearly catapulting himself out of the carriage. The box's inhabitant scratched frantically at the inside of its prison, croaking in anger at its captors through the wood. Nikhaya didn't speak a word of ancient Nord, but she fancied she knew a stream of profanity when she heard one.
She groaned. "Onmund, why? You've woken it up!"
Onmund was trembling...was it fear? Rage? Nikhaya thought she smelled both, and something dangerous besides, like living fire. He swayed rigidly where he stood as Nikhaya drew the horse to a stop. Lightning crackled over his clenched fists.
"A Draugr? You brought one of those...those monsters...out of the Barrow? For what?! What have you done, Nikhaya?" His voice cut into her like a shard of ice.
She turned to face him. Her eyes had lost all of their sparkle; she was now somber, subdued.
"Enthir made this one swear to keep quiet," Nikhaya murmured, "but really, what is the point? If the elf can't find a cure, all of Skyrim will know before long."
"What are you talking about? A cure for what?"
"Please sit down," she pleaded. "Khajiit will tell you everything, this very moment, but you must calm yourself first. Can you do this?"
Slowly, Onmund sat. He leveled a razor sharp gaze at Nikhaya. "Well then. Talk." His face was still flushed with anger, but the shock spell had vanished from his hands. "This had better be good."
Nikhaya nodded. She took a deep breath, trying to find her next words.
"Something terrible is happening," she said.


~~~~~


You got on a decent start. Keep on going
 

Khasrin

Fusozayiit
I know this fanfic seems to have died, but I promise it hasn't. I've been computer-less for months, that's all. I have a working laptop again, so if anyone is still reading this, I expect to be able to post new chapters regularly from now on.

Part VI of Songs of the Dead should be completely posted by the weekend. I've also started a second story called The Ashlanders and I hope to have the first part of that one posted soon as well, if anyone feels like some Companions fan fiction. <3
 

ultimatedovahkiin

Now's not the time for fear. That comes later.
I know this fanfic seems to have died, but I promise it hasn't. I've been computer-less for months, that's all. I have a working laptop again, so if anyone is still reading this, I expect to be able to post new chapters regularly from now on.

Part VI of Songs of the Dead should be completely posted by the weekend. I've also started a second story called The Ashlanders and I hope to have the first part of that one posted soon as well, if anyone feels like some Companions fan fiction. <3

YESSSSSSSS!!!! I've been wondering about this story!! When you get the first part of Ashlanders posted I'll be sure to check it out. ;)
 

Khasrin

Fusozayiit
YESSSSSSSS!!!! I've been wondering about this story!! When you get the first part of Ashlanders posted I'll be sure to check it out. ;)

Hehe, awesome :D Ashlanders will be a bit more serious and suspenseful than Songs, but lots of good stuff (I hope) if one likes Dunmer lore, the Companions, or Solstheim. And I'll have artwork for that one.

Not sure about the current chapter of Songs I'm writing, though. Might need further editing, I just used the phrase "passionate kiss" :vomit: lol
 

mattizcool

Flying lawnmowers are cool.
I've been wondering what happened to this story for awhile now. Good to hear that this is back as well as Ashlanders.
 

ultimatedovahkiin

Now's not the time for fear. That comes later.
YESSSSSSSS!!!! I've been wondering about this story!! When you get the first part of Ashlanders posted I'll be sure to check it out. ;)

Hehe, awesome :D Ashlanders will be a bit more serious and suspenseful than Songs, but lots of good stuff (I hope) if one likes Dunmer lore, the Companions, or Solstheim. And I'll have artwork for that one.

Not sure about the current chapter of Songs I'm writing, though. Might need further editing, I just used the phrase "passionate kiss" :vomit: lol

That sounds pretty good, I'll keep checking back for that first part. And I hate writing like that, it feels so weird :confused:
 

Khasrin

Fusozayiit
Part VI is up :D Sorry for the delay, I've been sick most of the past couple of weeks.

Pretty sure I checked it thoroughly for grammar and spelling and such, but I'm still not feeling great so you'll have to forgive me if it's not my best. <3

There is some PG-13 Nord-on-Khajiit lovin' in this one. So if that weirds you out, you've been warned (and as a side note, you're definitely reading the wrong fanfic...lol)
 

Khasrin

Fusozayiit
Oh, and also :eek: This thread has had over 5,000 hits?! I suspect a couple hundred of those were me proofreading and editing after the fact, and I'm sure plenty of those people thought it was awful, but even so, that's a lot of views.

That's pretty fluffing cool. Thanks guys! <3 Especially those of you who keep coming back to read it even though I take forever to post new stuff :p Khajiit hug for you:

kittyhug.jpg
 

Lord Rokinges

Official Fanfiction Judge
Just thought I'd judge now, seems to be quite popular and I just finished reading this...wonderful...fanfiction.​
ORIGINALITY: 9/10​
CHARACTER DEPTH: 10/10​
STORY: 7/10​
LORE LEVEL: 8.5/10​
COMMENTS: Well done! An enjoyable fanfiction, actually, fun to read a unravel the sole mysteries. Great descriptions, great spacing and all. I loved going into the character background. Keep it up!​
OVERALL: 8.5/10 (rounded)​
 

ultimatedovahkiin

Now's not the time for fear. That comes later.
oh geez, i completely forgot you had updated this a few weeks ago. Sorry I haven't read it yet. I will do that tomorrow.
 

ultimatedovahkiin

Now's not the time for fear. That comes later.
So glad I finally got around to reading this chapter. It was amazing, and that screamer in the background, that was pure genius it added more intensity and emphasized the idea that no where is safe. Keep up the good work and like always, I patiently await your next chapter. :)
 

ultimatedovahkiin

Now's not the time for fear. That comes later.
Hello again, sorry to bother you, I realize that now I have the last three comments on this thread, lol, not trying to spam you at all :D. But I've been wondering, is Ashlanders still going to happen? Because I went on there and I noticed that nothing has been posted yet. I'm not at all trying to rush you, I promise and I understand that you are busy working on this one and probably busy with lots of other stuff. I just wanna know if you changed your mind on Ashlanders or not because I was honestly excited about that story. Again, not trying to rush you or push you at all I know it probably seems like I am but I'm not. It's your story I'm not gonna demand you update it at a certain set time. Anyways, have a nice day or night or evening or morning depending on whenever you read this.
 

Khasrin

Fusozayiit
Oh wow, look at all I missed while I was away! :D Sorry for disappearing, it's been a rather insane couple of months here.

Funny you should mention that, I lost what I had written of The Ashlanders when my old computer crashed but I started to write it again tonight. I haven't changed my mind, in fact I'm more excited than ever to start it :) Also working on Part VII of SOTD and going to bring in some new characters, so I hope to have something soon.

I greatly appreciate you all taking the time to read and comment on my story, and for being so patient because I know I take forever to post new stuff :p Thank you <3
 

Khasrin

Fusozayiit
Ah, alright...so it looks like The Ashlanders will have to wait, sorry :sadface: What with work, starting the lengthy process of moving to another country, and all my other obligations I can only handle one fanfic at a time. So I'm going to work on Songs Of The Dead for now. It might be sporadic but I will keep updating it. :) Thanks for your patience <3
 

ultimatedovahkiin

Now's not the time for fear. That comes later.
We can wait on Ashlanders, there is no rush. Good luck moving, and with work. What country are you moving to, if I may ask, just curious. I hope that's not TOO personal I mean it's not like I asked where in the country. ;)
 

Khasrin

Fusozayiit
Lol no worries :) It's a long and complicated process, but if everything goes to plan I'll be living in Denmark within the next couple years.
 

ultimatedovahkiin

Now's not the time for fear. That comes later.
Lol no worries :) It's a long and complicated process, but if everything goes to plan I'll be living in Denmark within the next couple years.

Well have fun in Denmark in a few years, and I hope everything works out for you.
 

Khasrin

Fusozayiit
Question before I start putting up the next chapter, which is just about ready for posting (finally :D took me long enough):

I thought it might be interesting if Nikhaya and Onmund were keeping journals throughout the story, with entries at the beginning of each chapter (one chapter would be Onmund's, the next Nikhaya's, and so on) done in the style of the books you find in Skyrim. Might add a little depth to their tale if they could tell pieces of it themselves.

Anyone like this idea, think it's not necessary, etc.? If anyone wants to see this, I'll probably go back and add them to the last six chapters as well. Any and all feedback is appreciated :)
 

Hæð Eik

Active Member
Question before I start putting up the next chapter, which is just about ready for posting (finally :D took me long enough):

I thought it might be interesting if Nikhaya and Onmund were keeping journals throughout the story, with entries at the beginning of each chapter (one chapter would be Onmund's, the next Nikhaya's, and so on) done in the style of the books you find in Skyrim. Might add a little depth to their tale if they could tell pieces of it themselves.

Anyone like this idea, think it's not necessary, etc.? If anyone wants to see this, I'll probably go back and add them to the last six chapters as well. Any and all feedback is appreciated :)



I myself really like the idea of journals. Not only can you describe the scene really well with third person like you have been doing, but you can also use the first person journal entries to get a little deeper into the feels. Oh the feels.

AWESOME fanfic by the way. I almost hate to read everyone's stuff. It makes me realize how much more I need to improve on my own...
 

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